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"Hey baby. <3"

                    "Hey. (:"

"How are you?"

                    "Alright, you?"

"Doing good. Just alright, though?"

                   "Yeah, don't worry about it."
                         (I'm nothing worth worrying about.)

"Alright, as long as you're sure…"

                   "Of course. (:"
                         (The fear forces me to lie.)

"So, what are you up to?"

                  "Nothing, you?"
                         (There's blood everywhere.)

"Watching TV. Want to hang out later?"

                  "Can't, sorry. I have stuff to do. ):"
                         (I'm frightened of what you would do.)

"Ahh, okay. Some other time?"

                  "Actually, I can't. I'm moving."
                         (It's for the best...I hope.)

"What? When? Where?"

                  "Tomorrow. To another town, far from here."
                          (Where judgement cannot find me.)

"So...I'll never see you again? Are we breaking up right now?"

                  "I'm sorry. I didn't want it to be like this."
                          (You deserve so much better.)

"Oh. I see. Bye, then."

                  "Goodbye."
                         (You'll forget me soon enough. Everyone will.)
A text conversation between a boyfriend and his girlfriend who he doesn't know is suicidal.
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HeterodoxHipster Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Oh my. I've been reading sad stuff on here and this is one of them that made me cry :(
Truly great writing ;)
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Shy-Chey Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2012  Student Photographer
It's so true, I can feel the emotion, this is beautifully done :)
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megamiaki364 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Why does this look so familiar?...it's so easy to miss the tiny lies one makes so that no one knows what's going on...and often when I felt like this, all I wanted was for someone to notice and talk me out of it....

This is perfect.
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sugarbabbie Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Student Writer
I love how you have the caption of what the person is rlly thinking!!! and i rlly like the idea of the txting kind of poem and stuff
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The-writing-pony Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, thank you so much! (:
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sugarbabbie Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome
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SapphireDean Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
oh wow that's so sad
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oldbookslover Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I like how you made it like reality.
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GentlePeace Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow...
This cuts deep
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The-writing-pony Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. c:
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Lunawerewolfy Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow.
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sumgie1 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
Interesting. :)
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The-writing-pony Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :///3
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sumgie1 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
You're welcome.
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MidnightDash23 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
Interesting fallout and style of approach. Good writing.

Sincerely,
Darkys Black
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The-writing-pony Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
kfajsdfdns thank you :///3
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MidnightDash23 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2012
-whispers shyly- your uhh welcome...
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DamianDrazhar Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012
and I thought she had killed someone :shrug: interesting concept you have there
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The-writing-pony Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, thank you! :///3
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KittehLub Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this :3 <3
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The-writing-pony Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
kflandfdadkfnadkvasdk thank you. o///o
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KittehLub Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It's a beautiful piece of literature that shows a lot of strong emotion. I've fought suicidal thoughts for a long time and I currently still am. I am sure I have ADD, a type of OCD,and Bipolar Disorder. These three are not a good mix. :D But I am winning my battles against myself so far.
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The-writing-pony Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
;3; I'm so sorry that you are fighting those battles. Knowing you're still, however, proves that you are a very strong person. c: Congratulations on winning, and I hope that you continue to head toward victory with it.
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KittehLub Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! :3 Having my past though, I'm used to this. (Although I am.. Younger.. Than most suicidal people.)
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LadyAstor Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012
Wow that's sad.... but good!
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The-writing-pony Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! o///o
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Kokyal0rd Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:iconsadfaceplz: he dosent even know D:
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razors-in-my-mind Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
This is a very accessible piece x Its written well and evokes strong emotion. Well done.
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The-writing-pony Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my goodness, thank you! x3
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razors-in-my-mind Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
your very welcome x
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lost-in-wonderlandd Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow...that is some raw emotion.....it's beautiful writing, and an awesome concept. Love it
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The-writing-pony Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, thank you so much!
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lost-in-wonderlandd Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome!! I'm not crazy about depressing stuff, but this is stunning work! :hug:
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The-writing-pony Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Stunning....akdfndjfbgfasdkbf ohmahgosh, thank you.
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lost-in-wonderlandd Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome!!
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